the doctor

Wow SERIOUSLY? He posted the exact same thing on my post. Just saying. I have no idea still what he is trying to get at. Or she. Anyways, I like ...

What was vivid for me was your narration. I loved it, your voice is like a breath of fresh air on a hot sunny day. You were very honest in ...

I would suggest having more narration. This is a little too short. You have a few sentences in between, which is good. But I think you could add a bit ...

I love your reference to Eragon. The fact that he is even mentioned here - awesome. And I love Arya. The whole entire story is pretty magical. Remove the periods, ...

Wow, I'm impressed. Sounds like something I would write when I was in grade 6. We seem to have lost our imagination through growing up. Not a great process, but ...

A big repetitive. Also every song has a message, and I'm not sure what the message in this one is. It's all very scrambled. You need to make sure the ...

This poem looks very personalized to you. I don't get most of it because I'm either really stupid, or it's just because I did a night owl turn today and ...

I really admire your sense of courage,and even so, you made a short story sound humoungous, and that is a great talent. I think the title says it all. First ...

I thought this was extremely well done, and you have a talent for going beyond expectations of a 16 year old. The first few paragraphs hooked me up right away, ...

Cool story, but I'm kind of bored. To be honest with you most science fiction bores me because of all the setting and all that. I'm not trying to be ...

The fact that you are one year younger than me...well, that makes me jealous :P Well, my first impression of your work is that you have a highly descriptive voice, ...

This is a nicely-done excerpt. Although I have no idea what this was about, that was pretty cool Except for the fact that it has no descriptions whatsover and that ...

Wow, I was actually thoroughly impressed. I thought you brought a lot of creative aspect to the table. Your voice in your writing certainly has talent. In the beginning paragraph, ...

Hey, I really like this! I think its really cute and you should keep on writing scripts because its really entertaining to read. I don't think I could have any ...

Hey, I just read this. Its Okay. It could be improved. I guess, its a good start. - Explain more, and describe more on WHO the characters are, so we ...